Amanda and Kathryn's Policy Paper / Discussion

This is the discussion related to the wiki page Amanda and Kathryn's Policy Paper.

Whitney Postma 10 Oct 2009 00:45

I just saw a couple things that you may want to change. In your point 2 in your policy it says coast not cost which i think you intended. Also, I suggest putting your sources in parenthesis to avoid confusion between the sentences. Also, what exactly makes the urine change the color? At first I thought it was the taking of the antibiotic, but then later you said that they would have to take the antibiotic until their urine was normal. This didn't make sense to me.

MJames 11 Oct 2009 18:21

Look over your paper for grammer. on point 2 a that is mising towards the end of the segement. CHoose one company dont list companies the more specific you are the more likely peple will like your policy. Also instead of using two arguements that are similar look at others like people who may be against animal testing and therefore drug restance wouldnot matter because people wouldnt comply anyway so why harm animals if it wont help the humans they are trying to help anyway. Overall a good paper however.